I PAID Someone to Write a Medical School Application ESSAY. This is what I got..

hey everyone welcome back to the med bro channel so today what we’re gonna do is a very exciting video and we are going to be looking at some essay writing services and what that is is a service where somebody pays somebody else or a company to write them a letter or an essay or you know whatever it is that you need written for your classes you would pay somebody and they would get it back to you so we’re gonna find out what’s going on with this business we’re gonna ask them for an essay and we’re gonna look at it and we’re gonna analyze is it good is it worth it and then we’re going to talk about is it ethical that we should even be doing this the first step is going to be get on the website and we’re gonna put together the essay that we want and we’re gonna see the pricing and how everything works so let’s get right into it so the plan for today to keep it very interesting is we are gonna ask them for a medical school admission essay so the website already have pulled up here I just Google essay writing service and we’re gonna go with the first one that comes up at the top which I assume is at least one of the top five that people are using and that’s great minors already I don’t want personal information out here I don’t want to be associated with any of these just for the video so let’s get into this and make this as anonymous as possible a lot of concerns would this come from people getting essays from these sites submitting them and then the essays are put through a plagiarism checker and they’re actually caught for plagiarism so that is a big concern I’m looking at this and they’ve already you know on their guarantees they’re already guaranteeing things like plagiarism checks and uniqueness so I assume this is a concern that they have ironed out somehow maybe they have their own checker that they put it through but we’re gonna find out we’re gonna find out and we’re gonna put it through our own little plagiarism check so they’re asking us a few parameters here before they calculate the price a base price it looks like it’s 1784 just like a standard college essay so for the instructions let’s keep it very big volunteered hospitals shadow we are doctors what else do medical students to do I play the piano okay I so we are done putting together all of that stuff on this great minors website we’re gonna be asked them for a one-page medical school admissions essay with pretty generic statistics nothing really extraordinary happening with a student a lot of people are on this boat so we’re gonna see is this worth it is he worth it even to look at what they come up with for $24 a total $24 is it worth it to use this as a primary essay I’m very excited to see this so stay tuned for the rest of this video I think that’s done for what I’m shooting today and then we’re gonna skip ahead to when I get the essay and start analyzing it okay guys we are back and let’s get right into this I’m super excited to see what these writers have come up with so let’s get to it so one thing to note is they actually got back to me in four days so I purchased the essay which I gave them seven days to do and they got it to me a little early so that is that is cool I can see they give me a free revision that expires on March 11 so throughout this entire process I actually was not contacted by the writer to elaborate on anything or provide any additional information enough waiting let’s get right into what they gave me so interesting let’s see I’m really excited all right so an application essay so since an early age already kind of cliche in there but we’ll accept it since an early age I have been intrigued by the biological functions of an organism okay right off the bat I can already this is very very insightful as me already because I don’t know how many essays start with a very similar pattern for medical school admissions even mine like started out like this for my rough drafts and it was since early age I’ve been intrigued by something you know the human body helping people you know biology etc the sciences already I mean they’re going down that path but let’s see where they take it the human body is a remarkable machine with many diverse systems and with the complex structure which is a unique beauty Wow okay made biology classes my major interest which instigated my enhancement I feel like definitely there’s a component of thesaurus.com going on here this person is definitely definitely just typing in words on the source and then picking the really difficult sounding words and then throwing it on to you it’s kind of very obvious the school was the first place where I came to realize the importance of pursuing the calling and thus I was highly motivated to plunge in the atmosphere of medical sciences alright this is this is a shaky start for sure this intro is a shaky start to my experience which includes a red call here they’re actually using the stuff I gave them which includes a red cross missions volunteering at hospitals and that Asian Medical Students Association did they wait did I write that hold on we got to look into this what AMSA oh and do they just Google AMSA it’s American Medical Student Association they were Asian where do they even get that from maybe I told them all to Asian throughout I don’t remember what I put in here I instigated a pragmatic approach to source.com and provided psychological support being an emergency all right things are starting to fall apart guys things are starting to fall apart really fast and go downhill being an emergency room doctor I implemented my knowledge to assist doctors in treating infections and injuries performed follow-up visits and created treatment plans so any university is at its core is a place to capitalize dude like I know you probably just wrote this I like 8:00 p.m. or 9:00 p.m. or 12 a.m. totally just you know half-assing yet on the side probably while watching TV or something like that like this is this is this is not good at all so okay guys so we have shaman on the line and he’s gonna go through and read what he thinks about this essay so go ahead trum and just quickly give us your reaction to this amazing medical school application essay exactly exactly what I said the school man this essays about his school this is I say isn’t even about medical school admissions I mean I did write I am a pretty generic students instructions I paid 24 and I paid for I think four or five extra dollars for getting an elite writer top writers is one of their top writers I know I know the other it’s like some seventh grader do this is about to go to sleep as I got and another thing hold on I’m gonna put it through a plagiarism checker as well oh dude it says here I put on grammar least plagiarism checker and it says plagiarism was detected they were the word choice the style it’s all highlighted under plagiarism all right there you have it guys so that was the analysis of this essay from me chumming beneath wouldn’t answer but I mean she’s gonna say the same thing this is definitely a waste of your money and it’s better to you know even put out something that is your subpar work rather than putting someone else’s subpar work out front and even if it was the best writer in the world it’s still better and I would say you might even get better grades if you write a more inferior essay but it’s coming from your thoughts and your mind and your writing style it’s gonna show and it’s gonna just be a better piece of work I just wanted to look at what kind of essay we would get back because you do see these companies kind of really growing and being advertised everywhere there are so many of them and there are a lot of users there are a lot of people out there using these services so be cautious stay away from these services as you can clearly see that was a trash essay so thank you guys so much for watching make sure to subscribe and like and share the videos and there’s a lot of other helpful videos out on the channel so make sure if you’re new you check those out and we will see you guys in the next one [Music]

The college essays that got one student accepted to Stanford University

I figure there must be at least some students working on essays college essays procrastinating so I figured I’d make a quick video describing essays that worked that actually got one of our students into Stanford and why we think it worked okay so as some of you may know if you’re watching this video Stanford has a variety of pretty short essays so for example as you can see here the the prompt was what is the signal what is the most significant challenge that society faces today so as a little bit of background this student was interested in environmental engineering very passionate about environmental science things related to that wanted to study engineering so this was their answer its sustainability how can we consistently yes I’m worried about my grandkids provide food energy and clean water to a growing population challenge always comes with exciting opportunity however so this does there’s only 50 words but it does a pretty good job in a few ways first of all it relates to their interests right this person is interested in environmental science environmental engineering and as you can see this topic relates to sustainability as you probably know every one of your college essays should be trying to pitch and convince the university admissions committee to admit you write these essays are persuasive in nature you’re trying to show the school’s that you are the best possible applicant for them to accept so in this essay we see the person’s talking about their passion environmental engineering and sustainability so that’s a plus they incorporated a little bit of humor a little bit of weight with the yes I’m worried about my grandkids and then also the last line is great they indent to a new line and then they say challenge always comes with exciting opportunity as you know Stanford’s pretty entrepreneurial school so as you can see this line somewhat may appeal to an admissions officer because they’re explaining that even though this is a big problem there’s a lot of opportunity there’s money to be made there’s companies to be started and there’s a lot of interesting things for students to do in the environmental field okay here was the next short essay from Stanford it was it says how did you spend your last two summers fifty word limit so as you can see the student incorporates some fun things a little bit of sports a little bit of interest some of their passions again the students interested in environmental science they talk about scientific research chemistry teacher assistant there’s not much to see here but again just quicken to the point the student shows they’re well rounded which is what is important okay here’s the next short I say what historical moment or then do you wish you could have witnessed so here again it says that first spark was the caveman scared or entranced evil grin or sharing smile watching the caveman’s expressions during the discovery of the spark tell us so much about human nature again not much to see here I wouldn’t say this was the students best essay but it definitely didn’t detract from the application kind of interesting moment and yeah oh overall in okay 50 words short essay okay now we get into a bit of the deeper stuff a little bit of a longer essay so this one is what matters to you and why so we can read and it says I’ve noticed old people have a lot of time of thinking time life slows down in the go-go-go mentality begins to halt when I’m 75 I know I won’t remember the number of exotic trips or fancy dinners I attend it all think about is if I left the right mark on the world thus what matters to me is making this world a tad nicer there are two ways we can improve the world a do it myself or be change people a is simple for me two words science research B is more complex so I’ll give some examples if I see an overweight person at the gym I was smile and say keep it up why you can keep going in continuing this essay and again the end of the video there will be downloads and you can posit it if you want to read the whole thing but at the end of the day you know the student in this essay essentially tries to show they’re a good person and clearly it got across to the admissions committee because they got in he talks about a student he tutored again showing the volunteer experience giving back which i think is important and yeah overall it’s a pretty good essay if you read it it’s not the best essay of his but overall not a bad essay okay here is one of my favorite essays from the student so the question is please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences and the essay is to sing the alphabet song that’s my advice a student’s hand rocketed upwards what if the ethyl group is on the Left instead compound would be the same as before just rotated 180 degrees so we’d still name it ethyl methyl ether that’s why we use alphab alphabetical order when naming ethyl ether huh bit of a tongue twister students crumbled down my response another perplexed stare transformed into a lightbulb grin felt weird as I was always the one trying to understand new material this past summer my role reversed I was a chemistry teachers assistant as a TA I discovered you don’t truly understand material until you’ve learned to teach it so when I produced that master algae product I need to explain my idea to a wide variety of people including people who haven’t taken multivariable calculus and don’t live and breathe scientific research okay so let’s talk a little bit about this one so first of all the student took a bit of a unique unique approach using the quotes and treating it a bit like a conversation which I liked second of all this student as you can tell T aid a chemistry course in high school and the student did a good job of showing why that experience was unique for example the student shows that he was able to help students explain new material that he was a good teacher and at the same time showed that it helped him himself better understand the material you know it’s often said you don’t really understand something fully until you can teach it to others so that’s essentially what the student got across is I’m pretty you know on one hand this essay shows the students a good person the student volunteers spends his time teaching others who maybe don’t get the material as easy as him but on the other hand he shows that you know if he has some great science research or something like that some great adventure in he has good communication skills to get that idea across in an entrepreneurial scenario which i think is important when applying to a school like Stanford okay this is one of the most popular Stanford essays that people like to talk about it’s write a note to your future roommate so as you can see again pause the essay if you want to read it all some of its funny some of its fun I’m an East Coast boy now on the west coast yeah so some of its fun like that other parts include the chemistry bit makes it a bit more fun talking about how he’s always going to be in the research building why do we do which is Stanford’s energy in the environment building so the student does a good job of you know explaining that he’s done his background research on Stanford he knows the buildings he knows a bit about it so overall you know kind of interesting I say kind of interesting letter it’s a bit more unique than probably the average applicant which is great and yeah so overall pretty good essay if you ask me okay so here are a few more of the short essays if you want to read them just what newspapers and magazines websites do you like name your favorite books authors films and musical artists what five words best describe you as you can see you don’t have to put way too much effort into this his five words were happy eager dynamic nice optimistic nothing crazy nothing out of the ordinary none of these movies are crazy either you know Forrest Gump so overall don’t overthink these questions just put what you actually like and honestly these questions really aren’t gonna make or break your application they’re just kind of fun questions the school wants to see that you’re well-rounded have some interesting answers okay so that’s all we have and if you want more information you know check out our website we’ll be doing more videos and we look forward to you know continuing to produce videos and hear feedback from everyone thank you so much

How to Write the Perfect Essay

hi I’m yes or no and today I’m going to share with you all the literary tools I’ve picked up over my years of writing essays you might want to grab a pencil and some popcorn because this is gonna be long alright so I want to begin by talking about the title and the first sentence of your essay before anything else like literally before anything else you need to make sure your first sentence and your title are not generic they need to be eye-catching and make the audience want to read more because if you can make these parts good then you’ll already have the reader on your side rooting for you before they’ve read a single other word of the essay just think if the title is the clickbait of your essay then your first sentence is like your essay reaching out at and of the reader and saying hi I’m what you’re going to be dealing with for the next couple paragraphs so don’t have a sissy handshake don’t have a sissy si okay so after you’ve established that your essay is in fact totally cool and worth reading then you have to worry about the other words in it so my nice tip is expand your vernacular aka grow your geek speek aka learn some new words and use them creatively so one really easy way to stop sounding generic is to avoid starting your sentences with common words like I or however or although you know try something different instead like for example okay uh inches from the ground tommy’s nose was about to communicate to his body that this was the day they’d get their lunch money stolen right like itches isn’t even a complicated word but by starting the sentence with something different it gives that phrase and artistic flair uh but here’s the catch in your quest to sound artistic you don’t want to overuse these $100 words you know you don’t want to use big words that you don’t know how to use cuz when you do that you end up sounding like someone who uses big words just to try and sound smart and that’s trend pairen you need to learn how to use everything in moderation all right the next thing I’m gonna go watch it is a formulaic structure for how to write your essay now this is like the training wheels of essay writing meaning when you learn how to write like a big boy you can discard it until then it’s incredibly useful so let’s go so the perfect formula for an academic essay don’t worry we’ll get to creative essay soon enough the perfect formula for an academic essay is four to five paragraphs composed of one intro paragraph two to three body paragraphs and then one conclusion paragraph also known as the kink butene paragraph this little piggy went home to write an essay now bear with me because this gets a little bit detail your intro paragraph should be used to introduce some kind of question you want your essay to answer and then your body paragraphs should be used to develop some line of reasoning to discover the answer to that question and then your concluding paragraph should be used to summarize everything you’ve already said answer the question and then either one open up a new question to the world or to tie a nice pretty little bow on the end of your essay that ties everything together now if you’re in America you might be freaking out because I haven’t mentioned the word thesis once don’t fret thesis is just a fancy way to say this is the answer to my question if you need to present a thesis in your essay this is the structure you’ll use use the intro to present the thesis use the body paragraphs to develop an argument for that thesis and use the concluding paragraph to restate that thesis in different words easy peasy lemon squeezy but just in case this wasn’t all easy peasy lemon squeezy I will include a link down in the description that goes into more detail about how to write the perfect academic essay and I’ll give you some more advice all right there are a few things you need to remember when writing an academic essay one each paragraph should have its own unique point it’s it’s own unique special snowflake additionally every sentence should have a purpose if it doesn’t delete it next when presenting body paragraphs you always start with your strongest argument and end with your weakest one and lastly every transition should be fluid the last sentence of the paragraph should always have a hook to the first sentence of the following paragraph and vice versa okay now I’m just gonna throw a little bit of miscellaneous advice toward you guys and this one is what I call use your weaknesses to show your stripes use your weaknesses to show your strengths means that you should consider adding a counter-argument to your essay when you use a counter-argument it does two things one it shows that you’re intelligent enough to understand that there’s another side to the issue and two it gives you an opportunity to care that counter-argument apart with logic and make your point seem even more legitimate fun fact the best place to put a counter-argument is usually in that third body paragraph it just is hockey okay finally getting to you creative essay writers now creative essay writers you still have to use a lot of these elements I’ve already listed but you have a lot more freedom over where to use them so luckily or unluckily no training wheels for you yeah you’re just gonna have to roll with it so one thing that does stay consistent between creative essays and academic essays is that there’s still an idea that needs to be developed throughout the course of the essay and needs to be resolved at the end somehow so what I’m going to do for you guys is I’m going to include down in the description below a link to one of my successful Harvard application essays and also an outline describing how I use each paragraph to advance an idea so won’t give you a formula but it’ll give you a sense of what needs to be done and I’m telling you I’ve seen dead people as the sixth sense and seeing out write a good essay is the seven after you do it enough times you’ll start to sense how it’s done even if you can’t fully articulate it which leads me perfectly into my next point practice makes perfect oh oh I cannot stress this enough practice makes perfect when you’re trying to go from training wheels to whoa look ma no hands practice is the only thing standing between the two so I would encourage you to get as much writing under your belt as you can join the school newspaper write creative content for the internet etc etc because by doing something a million and both times you’ll finally learn the nuances of it and no amount of money no amount of talent no amount of watching youtube videos will ever teach you as much as practice will okay and at this point I know you guys might be like we want cold hard techniques you want a tip that always works make sure your grammar and vocab is a hundred percent correct you make one spelling or grammar mistake and it will undermine your entire essay so take the 30 seconds to invest in a Google search and learn the vocab and sentence structures that you don’t understand fully trust me that they’re there and there’s the world will thank you as will your essay reader alright maybe all my advice was fine and dandy you know for like 90% of situations but sometimes you’re just looking at a blank Word document and you’re too petrified to even start and I get it essays are like the basilisks of real life you can’t look an eye or they’ll kill you so sometimes you got to use a different approach now a lot of people would advise to you to just word vomit all over your blank page I think that’s one gross and too disgusting instead what I would advise you to do is write an outline an outline is great because it gives you a place to just write all your main ideas in a crude and ugly fashion and after you’ve come up with your main ideas the only thing left is figuring out how to creatively link them I mean creativity and main ideas are like talking on a cell phone and trying to cut a steak sure they can be done at the same time but when you separate on both activities become much easier alright last but holy cow not least read the requirements for the essay and follow them otherwise you could end up rain the completely perfect essay on a completely wrong topic hi I’m Erin Owens tone end up with the zero bye [Music]

Writing a 5 Page Research Essay in 1 Night! (+ A Secret Grammar Trick)

Writing a 5 Page Research Essay in 1 Night! (+ A Secret Grammar Trick)

hey everyone welcome back to my channel and today is March 9th it’s a Thursday and this vlog is going to be specifically my journey of writing a five page paper that’s due tomorrow I usually try not to procrastinate and this is a really situation of procrastination but I was just serviced this week I had a draft for different paper due today in like an hour by hour to finish that I cost all this morning it’s 12 o’clock reading outside of class sophomore yesterday I had a final presentation so the couple days before that I was working on my final presentation and then I had homework for another class so it’s just a lot of like hectic stuff that happens and we only got be like official prompt of this paper last week I’ve only had a week to do it it’s not like something super crazy but I know I can like turn out in one day so I’m it’s like show you the journey beyond just sometimes it does happen it’s not that you want to procrastinate but sometimes you just are really busy in college because you have other assignments that are like lined up like obviously I had a paper like of drafty today so I had to work on that paper instead of working on the paper that’s due tomorrow so it just happens but I’m going to show you my journey and it starts with guys cons class and now I’m having lunch at my three house I’ve been like a little nook area and today is burrito bar day so I mean my room I don’t eat upstairs because I just wanted to like relax a little and be antisocial so I’m gonna watch the season finale of America’s Next Top Model about loaded and then look at this you guys I have a nice bowl with chips and then we have some chicken to fish some lettuce lots of block corns pico cheese some eat this and enjoy and then we’ll get to the paper writing everyone okay like funky really wanted six on the shades so weird that was over now we’re going to be using collaborative research for our paper no go realistic more importantly our professor and our GA wants like hard copy like books like physical books from the library of some sources so we have a couple of those probably get like two this will be good on this but here we are at the music library me show you I showed you this in a previous vlog as well we had our lock pixels cosplay advertiser here and then I have two of my lectures on this one or this lecture hall head over here showing her a call and I will not spell it Schomberg a library entrance is play so getting down and dirty old fashioned getting information from books pieces library oh yeah all right we’re on it so you saw the last clip of me study and not studying the library doing research so I got one full page of research like singles we felt really good so now I’m going to my class for an hour discussion and then I’m done class for that meant get ready I’m definitely in need of an athlete on the fatigue right now it’ll very very long a long holidays like I said a super-busy right off condition all right so I finished with class and then I went to my 3 oz for like an hour I’m tracks when I grab some stuff the pink meeting up this 19 campus team going to lean them in a good meeting and recapping our event on Tuesday which is great but look at how gorgeous your fun side is looking right now yes PCL is playing right penny time uni and I vlog that I’m there right everyone so I’m sorry I forgot to vlog at my pink meeting but I’m home now at DG and I’m doing some research or update more research before Yom Kippur we have to look for YouTube interview so I’m watching some of these and I’m going to write some song now is this up or analyzing some songs and I’m like every out-of-focus amazing but yeah got a little reach there but I can’t we’re completely out of focus there you go Oh district lie a lot I wish stretch doesn’t just like its trunk announcement amazing they have some nice finishes research in my bed and I’m gonna go ahead and head upstairs and do some writing and stuff like that so alright so I contact that because they weren’t flying eyes but English I’m downstairs now and I’m still working on my paper and I finished one turn the brightness down sounds crazy okay but I finish all the research forms so I have the different articles and novels and CDs and stuff cited researched it up like the source and then like the notes I took from it that I want to use I’ve all that ready and now it’s time to actually write my paper but it’s 10:20 now and I’m going to take a little break and respond to some emails just to cut up the work a little niceness all the research you might bring a little break and answer some emails like a lot of emails sometimes from you guys which is cool but mostly business school related things like that so I have to answer them but I wanted to show you guys something super cool that I actually utilized now and it’s the system school I’m really Orange right now but the line is just really funky but it’s the system called grammarly and it’s super super cool and basically a like spellcheck and programmer program or extension that you can have on your browser okay so I say like I’m writing this email and I wrote the sentence and it’s just like my name is Anita I wanted to reach out to you all to tell you about a great so I applied this was great the extension the Chrome extension automatically like shows you you have two mistakes in this email and one of them being is great so after you hover over it then oh let’s solve it great and then it changes it and it even knows things like params say like grammarly and then I can capitalize it like that so it’s really easy like pixel things and then I like search your email and then once you have the all clear gee that means everything is good in regards to choose grammar and spelling so this is a completely free extension so all you have to do is go to gramley and you can download the extension or like add it to Chrome so here it is it just exists and right now so yeah so it’s gramley for Chrome it can check grammar and spelling for mail and other like applications and then what’s really cool is you can like make a new document and say like I’m writing this in word basically I’m going to copy and then paste this over to my grammar li page and then it will go ahead and check to see stand checking and then I will say there are seven advanced issues which are not included in like the free trial basically you have to pay more to get like the advanced grammar features on it but I mean this is like basically good for app so it’s great if you really care about making sure your grammar is correct and learning from it because it not only tells you what’s wrong is like the thing is with Microsoft Word it will say like we find something a hit like something’s a fragment but it will never fix it like it won’t tell you how to fix it while grammar actually does so it’s kind of cool but yes and if you have the premium version you can like install it automatically into like Microsoft Word or whatever you’re processing like word processing system is so grammerly is a part of it right now I have like the classic word spell check and grammar check which sometimes is inaccurate you see it so if I have a lot of like mistakes and stuff in here all right but with that I’m going to go ahead and answer a couple emails and do that a little bit and then we’ll get on to paper writing all right everyone so update it’s been about an hour later and I finished about half my paper so it’s been about three and a half or two and a half pages we’re almost over three pages and it’s a fourth page paper so we’re getting there it’s going good so keeping you all posted all right so time for another hourly update it’s currently at 12:30 another hour in and I’m just doing my conclusion paragraph so we’re almost done and then I’m going to go ahead and sleep on it and proofread it tomorrow and then maybe run it through grammerly just to see if it can catch anything that microsoft word did it in regards to grammar not necessarily spelling and then I’ll go ahead and submit it tomorrow two o’clock that looks going to finish this up and then I’ll wrap up the vlog all right so it’s 1248 and we are officially finished look at this beauty oh yeah so I’m just going to ahead and wake up early tomorrow he’ll proofread it make sure it’s all good once my mind is like clear and I have all this dizzy gillespie out of my head but yeah I hope y’all enjoyed this vlog way it was helpful enjoying some tips and tricks and just showing me that it is possible to get things done in a crunch when you need to know especially it was like platforms like grammarly I think it’s really cool and I doesn’t want to try the premium sometime because my grammar is pretty bad when it comes to essay writing and more like the person view all my thoughts out so Kelvin is a much better like paper writer so he’s still working on his butt alright thank you all so much for watching it’s fishing for trout walk and I’ll talk to you then bye 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Writing a Thesis Statement

Writing a Thesis Statement

hello and welcome as you continue to develop your skills in a research and writing I wanted to take this episode of the ten minute teacher to help you in developing your thesis statement as I shared in a previous video good theological research and writing is about the thinking process and where that process begins is in the ability to ask good questions and to honestly question everything kate turabian and our students guide to writing college papers says this a researchers most valuable asset is the ability to be puzzled by seemingly obvious things like the shape of coffee rings or that the hair on your head keeps growing while the body hair doesn’t cultivate the ability to question the commonplace and you’ll never lack for research projects questioning the obvious is also the first step in critical thinking which is a skill much prized in the workplace so if you want to be successful not just in academics but in your workplace or any environment the ability to question everything to develop questions out of stuff that seems obvious to everybody else is your first key to success so let’s take for example this story out of Genesis 34 in which the sons of Jacob are confronting Chesham and Haymore because they’ve deceitfully taken their sister Dinah into a marriage relationship and they are really they’ve defiled her and they’ve defiled Israel by the way they’ve taken her so they they basically have this plan of tricking them so that they can conquer them and punish them for what they’ve done and to do that they plan this idea that well hey your people are uncircumcised but if you want to take our women as your wives you have to be circumcised first so really then this brings up the question of circumcision and what is it about circumcision that made Israel so different than the nations around them and that’s where you begin to find your research question by asking what intrigues you what causes your friends to ask questions what ideas claims or facts make you think wow I didn’t know that or how can that be possibly true questions ultimately lead you to important topics so that leads us to step two we need to pick a topic first you want to pick something meaningful a topic that matters to you and you want to narrow down your topic to a very specific idea so in this example which is better a study of the Old Testament or the book of Genesis well book of Genesis well what about the book of Genesis or the life of Abraham well the life of Abraham is better it gets more specific we keep going the life of Abraham versus the call of Abraham how about the call of Abraham vs. God’s use of circumcision in the call of Abraham so you see how very quickly we went from a very broad topic to a very specific one each one improving the potential quality of a research project so after you’ve kind of narrowed down an idea the next best thing is to consult at least to reference works about your topic so in my case I’m gonna open up the anchor Yale Bible Dictionary excellent resource and in it I find this article by David Noll Friedman who says this in the ancient Near East circumcision was widely practiced in two distinct forms certain classes of Egyptian men especially priests slit the foreskin to let it hang free many men from Western Semitic groups in Syria and Palestine removed the foreskin altogether the origins of the practice are irretrievable so he’s saying hey there’s all these groups that used circumcision and knowing where it started no one will ever be able to solve that question essentially so now that I’ve researched and a couple of reference works the next idea is then I have to pick a topic that has a clear issue or problem to do that effectively I’m really going to discover the issues at stake how does your topic fit into the big picture of history or culture or religion what topics are similar to your topic what are some of the subcategories of your topic what do your friends think about this topic is it interesting to them or a what-if question what if this happened or what if this topic were considered today in a different cultural context all these what-if questions get you really thinking about the deeper issues so next you’ll want to do a two to three hundred word summary write about what you’ve learned write about the basic issues surrounding the topic but understand you’re not making any attempt to solve quote-unquote hit any issues that are coming up in your mind you’re not trying to solve these questions you’re only trying to demonstrate your own understanding of the issues once you’ve done that you can move on to step three which is to formulate your research question next you want to formulate two or three possible research questions and how did you this well of course when a narrow your topic down to a specific question I recommend avoiding things like the standard who what when and where instead really focus on why and how these tend to be a lot more intriguing and these generate topics that are far more interesting for research you also want to consider turning your question into a problem by asking a so what question and so by finding a question and then turning it into a problem again it engages not only your mind as a researcher but it will help engage the mind of the reader so moving on from our story in Genesis a good topic might be circumcision in the call of Abraham and a question you might ask one possible one is did other people groups in the Middle East practice circumcision if so why did God choose circumcision as a sign for Abraham so in other words if this is well as a common practice as one of our books seem to suggest why did God use something that’s common as a symbol to set people apart here are some examples of things that would make a bad research question anything that the answer is too easily found in a single source if you can find the answer to a question by opening up your first book it’s not going to be a good research question anything that there’s only one irrefutable answer we’re not looking to research something that only has one answer that everybody agrees is the answer look for something that is controversial or has different opinions that way you can really dig in and explore your topic also if your research question has too many resources that means your question is really too broad so if you’re finding thousands of possible articles and resources that all addressed this question chances are you’ve picked something far too broad to be considered you want to find something that has a good amount of resources but not so many that everybody else has thought to ask those same questions this brings us the step 4 writing of your thesis so what is a thesis then it’s a concise statement of your topic that clearly defines both the purpose and the scope of your paper so here’s an example thesis statement given our earlier study this paper will examine God’s use of circumcision in the call of Abraham as a unique sign of divine covenant in the Near Eastern culture so here we have the topic God’s use of circumcision in the call of Abraham we have the purpose a unique sign of divine covenant and the scope which limits the study is within the context of Near Eastern culture another way to kind of visually represent this and it helps if you maybe write this down for yourself as you’re writing out your thesis statement is to put each of those key phrases into a topic purpose and scope statement you also find as you’re writing out these statements a useful formula from turabian section 2.4 says for example friedman claims and then you write what they claim but this researcher will show what you know that shows what you’re gonna explore so that’s a good formulaic example and there’s others within turabian another way to make sure you have a good thesis statement is to find an issue in blank that raises a question about a specific aspect of blank whenever you’re looking at who’s the answer will help explain a larger theme feature or quality of blank again you fill in these things so if you can write this sense and fill that in in a way that makes sense to say a friend so fill this in with your ideas share it with a friend and if it makes sense to them it’s probably a good thesis statement step 5 then is to write a basic outline and in your basic outline identify the main points that flow from your thesis statement one of the main problems you need to solve you want to write a preliminary three or four point outline as a starting point for your research okay and that’s it for the first five steps for developing your thesis statement but you may say I’m still confused or I’m still struggling with this whole process well here’s kind of a little exercise you could do that may help get your creative juices flowing and this is a little teaching exercise choose a task that is familiar to your making coffee saddling a horse making a paper airplane whatever you understand write a set of instructions to teach someone else this task and then I want you to go and teach someone else to do your task as that person tried to follow your instructions what came up how would you improve those instructions and as you do that you’ll kind of get your mind thinking about that process of teaching others to understand something that’s understandable to you and that’s exactly the same process of writing a research paper you’re taking something that you understand because you’ve researched and you’re trying to show somebody else how you came to a conclusion all right now it’s a great time to head to the library and begin your research

ROOM TOUR 2019 (finally lol)

ROOM TOUR 2019 (finally lol)

I have been putting this video off since September in September I moved from the basement in my house back upstairs I completely redid my bedroom and that video happened to go viral is at the end of that video I said my room’s not finished now put up a room tour as soon as that’s finished it’s been nine months since I posted that video and I honestly don’t think that my room is ever going to be finished I put out filming it for so long though because I felt like I had to reach some standard that honestly is unattainable because I spent months trying to make stuff or I think of stuff to put my room finally feel like I’m at a place where I can share my bedroom with you and that’s what I’m doing today [Music] so this is the first corner of my room and I worked so hard to find stuff that would fit here so immediately behind me I have a hook on my door which I used to store my backpacks and all my jackets which I live in Michigan so at any given time there’s usually about five jackets on the hook I did clean for you so right now there’s only one on this side I kind of have a lot of different things I have a mirror that I honestly love and I really really wanted a full-length mirror in here it’s it’s there’s not really any better place in my room for it trust me I’ve looked I also have my hamper which not much to say about that it is cuter than any other hamper I’ve ever had but like it’s still not that cute you know hanging on my wall I have a chalkboard calendar which honestly never gets used I thought it would be a good investment and I haven’t really touched it yeah I just looked at it and the month written on it is August so I haven’t updated my calendar since August and then on the other side of that wall I do have a little chalkboard thing that I write you know handy stuff on I use that one more than I use my calendar and then I have a little hanging basket I think it’s a planter honestly I don’t know but I put scrunchies and hair ties on it and then on the floor this is part of the cat area there’s her scratching post and usually some toys because she drags them over there and then she has another little scratching post on the floor that I’ll show you when we move away from my door area we have my TV dresser area I have not hung it on the wall even though most of you guys told me to hang it on the wall I just feel like I don’t need to put that many holes in my wall or buy a TV mount I have my furniture finally situated where I feel like I have enough space without taking the TV off the dresser and then we have my dresser under it my dresser and bed frame is from art van a lot of you have asked about that but it’s from art van and it was in the clearance center both of which probably aren’t good because I’m pretty sure art van is regional and the clearance center everything goes away once it’s gone not much to be set there I do have a Gamecube right here I was playing a spongebob battle for bikini bottom for a long time and that’s why my Gamecube is still there [Music] [Music] and then I have really cool posters which I’m super excited about this one is a Tom Petty one I read the petty biography and honestly it was fantastic I have an Eagles poster over here but that’s more in my gallery wall type thing I’ve put up over there so I’ll talk about that more in a second I don’t think you’d be interested in what’s my drawers I could be totally wrong it’s just close this area of my room is probably the cutest or most personal it kind of houses all of my stuff [Music] [Music] I have a gallery wall going on I got it from the thrift store it says tender Valley seed company and then this painting I actually painted I painted it in my following a Bob Ross tutorial video my Eagles at my Tom Petty poster because they’re super vintage II feeling they’re just reprints they’re not actually vintage but it’d be cool if they were to always take the scenic route it’s from the target dollar spot it’s actually from a puzzle and that is like the guide to what the finish puzzle shouldn’t look like and then I still have my letter board that I’ve had forever it still has the same Mountain Goats lyric on it I also have this movements poster movements as a band that I really like I have a lots of Polaroids on a cable that I recently bought I’m not sure how I feel about the cable I’m happy the Polaroids are up there but I feel like it’s not the spot but they never stay on my wall so I don’t know Polaroids are iffy an art cart I finally finally realized what to do with that stupid gray cart and now it sits in this corner we have art supplies which honestly I don’t know why I didn’t think of it before I’ve had this gray cart that I bought from Target for it has to have been at least a year now and in every room video I have done I literally have said in every single one I don’t know what to do with this cart art cart I can’t believe I was so blind basically it has canvasses many many many canvases it houses paint brushes acrylic paints oil paints paint Center rulers Sharpie markers for outlining it also has a linocut kit that I recently got basically anything that has to do with art is in here this is the newest of the bunch we had this one but I haven’t finished yet but and then I have this cubby system which honestly it’s not the best but you know [Music] so in my coffee I have multiple different drawers the top left drawer is mostly technology stuff and hats I don’t know how those categories go together but that’s what I put in them my top right drawer it’s snacks because those are very important to keep in your bedroom this one right here that I showed you is mostly health and beauty stuff and then this one that I also showed you houses makeup palettes and then right now scrunchie stock for my Etsy store into the bottom ones that kind of are out of sight so I don’t take as good care of them we have a basket we have a basket of cat toys which is actually accessible to my cat she will pull things out of this basket on the bottom shelf my trip funds put all cash and spare change in a jar and hopefully I’m able to take a trip at some point this whole pile of clothes right here is my altar pile which is stuff that I bought from the thrift store that I need to alter in some way that lives there because it’s not ready to get upgraded to the closet yet and then this cubby is full of stuff that I can’t really use this is an essential oil diffuser that I got before I’d learned that essential oils are really bad for cats this is a candle and then I also have a Yankee candle back there and then we have my bed area which honestly takes up a majority of the room and that is why I had so much trouble rearranging the furniture in here for so long because I chose to purchase a queen-size bedroom set not the best decision on my part but this is what it looks like so I have a cat bed on my bed even though my cat doesn’t sleep in it she sleeps in my bed with me I still have the bed there just in case everything on my bed is from pretty much a different place or Target actually most of us from Target throw blankets throw pillows pillowcases sheets and then I have a big down comforter I don’t know where it’s from because it was a gift but that is there and this is my window this is my cat’s favorite place and honestly probably one of mine commute a prettiest girl and now we’ve come to the area that took me the longest time to realize that I need it and that is my desk area I don’t know what part of me thought that I didn’t need a desk or workspace in my bedroom but I realized I needed it and now I have it we have a desk and honestly that’s pretty much it I have the same thing that I had in the corner over there just another one of these chalkboard things currently has a lyric on it I try and change it up with videos but it’s been that for a while and that’s honest to god it I have a desk in a chair and that sign this is my pile of cords that I feel like everybody has and doesn’t show I don’t there’s nowhere to put it so what am I supposed to do this is also under my bed where I conveniently threw everything that I did not want to show you these are my instruments if you didn’t know I actually know how to fling music [Music] I feel like I overhyped what my room was going to be I thought I was gonna be like an interior designer and they get some crazy thing but no it did not turn out that way yes I’m still happy with it it’s not perfect but it is home thank you for watching I hope this was satisfying I hope this is what you’ve been waiting for and I’ll see you in the next video bye oh yeah subscribe if you want to